The Fate of Omega: Part One

[Charles Nicol]

Great story overall, though there are unneeded descriptors, now and again. Not every feature needs to be noted, unless it is to give the narrative a point. Otherwise 'A' effort.

[Harold Ember]

Thanks. I was trying to be work on being more descriptive.

[The Black Knight]

This is a short and sweet story :)

[Harold Ember]

Thanks! Hopefully I can keep it this way.